Thread:A Bystander/@comment-27448112-20161130031011

Okay. As awkward as it sounds, I will need your insight about my English homework. Now, before you say anything about why I made this, let me explain.

So about the homework, I was told to make an essay about anything I want. Seems easy enough. However the catch is, I have to gather constructive criticisms about my essay from people I don't personally know. And so, I think that this wiki may be a perfect source of criticism.

If you may, please take the time to read my essay and reply a constructive criticism here in my wiki message wall (don't reply on my tweet). I would be very, very thankful if you contribute to my homework. However, let's agree: Let's keep this between you and me. My essay is quite personal. So please, if you're willing to read it, don't spread the word.

I'm sorry that I'm posting non-Deep-Sea Prisoner stuff here. I just thought that this would be a good idea to bring up here since I don't personally know all of you.

I'll be deleting this thread after around 10 hours.

So yeah. Thank you in advance and I'm looking forward for the responses! :)

Essay: Friends, Foes

''There are two general types of people in terms of our relationships with them: friends, the people that care about us and are always by our side, and foes, the people who basically have some form of hatred towards us without any good reason. I’d like to talk more about these people, especially their influences to my life. I’d also like to talk about how to treat them.''

''Having friends is almost like a godsend for me. I’m usually alone, thinking of what to do to solve my personal problems. Luckily, these people back me up. They comfort me. They give me advice. I feel relieved when they are around because not only they are present to help, but they also like to bring up the good vibes in me, especially those who I talk to online. It is a great time-passer to talk to them whenever I have free time. Now, how do I treat them? Of course, I will treat them the way that they treat me! It seems unfair that I’m just getting the good stuff. To equalize, I shall also give the good stuff to them. I will be nice to them. I will give them advice. I will bring the good vibes to them.''

''Now off to the dark side of the topic, we will talk about my foes. If having friends is the best thing I could have, then having foes is the worst thing I could have. They are one of the core reasons I’m having trouble with coping up with my tasks. It’s not uncommon being teased at school because it’s almost like it cannot be a school day without being teased most likely due to jealousy. I have been accustomed to that nature, but it still grinds my gears. I’m starting to work on a solution on how to treat them. I could do the easy way by simply ignoring them and continue life without them being the obstacles. Or, I could do the hard, but better way by socializing with them. Most of my foes, in general, almost don’t even care about people they pick on (that includes me). Nevertheless, I will keep trying, while still taking all the harsh words they will release from their mouths.''

''I’d like to end this essay by saying that it’s still pretty much a normal life that I have. While I am lucky to have great friends, I also have naughty foes, which is normal to have in life. So basically, I’m just a normal being, not really having a special type of life. So if you have this thought that your foes are bringing you down, think about your friends that will cover you, and let the cycle of the normal social life take place.''  